Kia ora, I am a student at Marshland School, Welcome - Haere Mai. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note my work may include spelling or other errors because some of it will be my first drafts. I would like to get your feedback - comments, thoughts, questions and ideas to help me Learn Create Share.
Tuesday, January 14, 2020
The 39-story Treehouse
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Kia Ora Billy,
ReplyDeleteYou have done a tremendous job on this post. I particularly like slide 2 where you introduce the characters. It looks great and I like how you have included a little bit about each character under their respective picture. I also like how you have framed their subsections; it’s very aesthetically pleasing and helps your reader understand who the book is about.
If you had a 39 storey treehouse, what activities would you put in there? I think I’d include a popcorn machine and a super long twirly slide. Did you know if you put a hessian sack on a slide and sit on it going down, you can go faster. If we did that in the treehouse, we’d definitely need a mattress at the bottom to slow your speed!
Just be careful watching the formatting of your spaces in your blurb section specifically. Some of the words run together with a comma in the middle. Perhaps you could edit that so it’s a bit more consistent for your readers.
Happy blogging!
Ngā mihi maioha,
Shannon (SLJ)